Ann King

Okay phrases such as They were going to have sexual intercourse should not be in a erotic novella. Okay first and foremost this story was funny because the sexual descriptions were so horrible. For real, if any of that stuff was really said during sex for the first time I would probably run like hell. For Real. While the story could have been good I think that it lost me because half the time I really just wanted to laugh.

I didn't like either MC. Kate came across as weak and whiny and Cory was kind of an a$$. He wanted Kate, but he wasn't good enough, but then he allowed one of his BFFs to use her, knowing the whole time what was going on. Even though he ended up telling her in the end, I don't think he deserved her. And Kate was annoying with her, I want Cory, but I can't do this.

I didn't like either MC. Kate came across as weak and whiny and Cory was kind of an a$$. He wanted Kate, but he wasn't good enough, but then he allowed one of his BFFs to use her, knowing the whole time what was going on. Even though he ended up telling her in the end, I don't think he deserved her. And Kate was annoying with her, I want Cory, but I can't do this.