hen Phillip, a billionaire, presents Victoria, a lingerie model, with a slave contract after he books her for a private showing for $50,000, it excites her like nothing else and she can't resist. She's always been on the hunt for a guy who will dominate her. I would've liked some discussion here, a little bit on guidelines or ideas. Never mind safe, sane and consensual, she signed without even getting his definition of 'slave' or knowing what he intended to do to her, which is insane. He could be some psycho who wants to chain her up in a basement, and NOT in the sexy-BDSM-dungeon way, in the I'm-gonna-fatten-you-up-and-eat-you-for-lunch-someday kind of way. Also, I don't expect short stories to be packed with characterization, but the distant narration kept me from getting a sense of the characters at all. I liked the direction and the author always provided an adequate sense of space and scene and I can see some potential here for a good serialization, but this is very rough. The improper punctuation and stilted dialogue throughout drove me nuts. Some of the narration is just as stilted as the dialogue, especially during the physical parts, which is where it needs to rock to hook readers. As a result, it is not as steamy as it could be, given the context. Many of the actions were hot, but the way they were described was not. An okay effort, but it could benefit from a skilled editor familiar with erotica to jazz it up and make it shine. ( )