Narratives

Anyone want to start it off?

Once upon a time, there was a tiny little village that had lots of tiny little people living in it. These people are called....

(finish the story)

Worse than the noise, however, was the battery of fearsome hazards facing the diminutive Pyreeyo. Feral cats the size of elephants, automobiles the size of cathedrals, insects the size of eagles - these were just some of the life-threatening dangers faced daily by the 'little people' as they struggled to survive in a world created and inhabited by capricious giants. That they survived at all in any numbers was assisted in no small part by the poorly-evolved perception abilities of the Northern PUkricanese, who simply failed to observe the tiny Pyreeyo. However, it was during the confusion generated by the civil war, that an incident occurred which precipitated their flight : one clear winter's morning ...

*not part of the story*

Casey (or anyone in my English class last year) do you remember the class story we wrote on LibraryThing?? It's about one of our teachers who fell in love with a spider. It got quite strange. It ended up two people *not looking at anybody* kept writing about them turning into vampires then we all turned into vampires. No one goes on the stroy anymore.

yes, of course i remember. we were going to kill ms dearden, but we havent yet.

hehehe GO ME

yeah, sure. go athina!

Oh dear, have we abandoned the narrative? Must be the fault of my last contribution then :-(

All I was trying to do was develop #3 in a way that incorporated the most important element from #2, i.e. the "tiny-ness".

Should we maybe start again?

^aww, its not your fault. We just are easily sidetracked. You can start again. :)

"Once upon a time, in a galaxy far far away, there lived ..."

a colony of pencilcases. There were big sizes, smaller sizes, black ones, rainbow ones and the odd invisible pencilcase.

One day, while the cases were going about their day to day lives, they came across a most peculiar object...

It was a bright blue everlasting gob-stopper.

"How peculiar" thought ...

the colour-blind crayon who lived in a rainbow pencilcase.

"Oooh, a bright red ball. What shall I do with it? I know! - I will .... "

"draw on it and see if it turns purple!"

So the crayon drew on teh gob-stopper and it became ....

lime green, but the crayon thought it was purple so she happily rolled it down to the ...

when suddenly, she heard a shout from on the ground. It was Lilly Lollypop, asking her if she wanted to go to the Sugababes concert tonight. "Sorry, I cant Lilly" replied the crayon. "I have to...."

"fix my roof, do you mind giving me a hand, maybe I can get ready in time?"

"Errr, ....................

"Nope, I can't get ready in time. Turns out I need to wax my legs. It's been a while. I thought I was wearing pants but it was just my over-grown leg hair. Sorry. Maybe. ........................

"You can help me with my legs I have a lot of hair"

"Ummm, no I'm sorry. I'm germ-a-phobic and to be honest. . . I have no idea what kinds of evil bacteria could be looming in that jungle"
"OH, okay. Well they're not that bad. But okay. I will do it myself. Are you sure you're not even a little bit tempted?? You can stroke it if you like..."

. . .

"No thanks." She replied quickly, running back to her house.

...

"Naww, damn! And I thought I'd made a friend. Maybe I came across a bit too strong?"

. . .

I was left pondering my almost-friend. I felt a bit sad but then I looked at my legs and decided that feeling sad wasn't going to help them get any less hairer so I got out my waxing kit and..

Realised that I was all out. I attempted to scrape the last few bits from the bottom, but it was useless. My legs were just too hairy.
I sat there in sadness for a good half hour when suddenly. . .

A man made of chocolate appeared at my window!

"WOOOO." He said in a ghostly voice. "WOOOO."

"Go away!" I yelled, covering my jungle-like legs with a blanket.

"Wow! Those are some hairy legs!" He replied, tipping his strawberry and creams hat. "It's a jingle out there, bru."

He opened my door without invitation and passed me a golden jar.

"Never ending wax and..it pulls out the most stubbornest of hairs, I used it on my gorilla, it works wonders and it never runs out! Good day, Hairy!"

I stared at the jar in wonder and the lid opened with a pop.

"ARRGGGH!" I screamed..

Toni Renae Patterson.
Nice.

That was really, really, really good!
But, i kinda don't get it.
I know that her mum never said she hated her b/c that was a dream but how did the whitch come into things?? And did Chace really mean 'under-age clubbing' or was he just using that as a description??

Anyhoo.
I still loved it!
:)

^did you love it so much that you felt the need to post ur response twice?

haha just yankin ur chain. that was awesome narlene! loved it heaps.

just yankin ur chain
Ew.

Yes.
I loved it that much (:

30: Um..it's not really a story. It's like a part of a thing that I just wrote..I was writing something completely different but then I deleted it all and started to write that. I'm not sure what part the witch has in the story yet..but I like her so I might make her an important secondary character. I'm planning to make Toni and Chace fall in love..Yeah, I love how Toni's first and middle names sound together so I used it..but I made her look like you, Leah. :)

31: Thanks. You're an awesome writer as well. :)

oh get ur mind out of the gutter. ;)

33: Yeah, I thought so but I didn't want to sound cocky.
34: My mind is safely in the gutter and thats where it shall stay!

^Yeah. I used Toni's names but it's just pretty much you Leah, because you're that interesting. :D Haha. LOL, about the gutter. :)

LOL.
Yeah.
I can be very moody when it comes to people I don't like.
If there was a Chace in my life, he would know I didn't like him.
In my opinion there is no use pretending if ya don't lime someone why lie?

Anyways thats enough of my life lessons in wich nobody should follow. (:

p.s: I think I know who little Mr. Chace is based on.. *wiggles eyebrows suggestivley*

OME OME OME OME MRS. PIGGLEBOTTOM!! I. CAN'T. BREATH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Thats is so good!
And yes I agree, the whole non-social butterfly and shy business is not me.
LOL.
But the whole anger and envy for beautiful people is.... Especially the anger.... *blush*

LOL.

hmm... I wonder who the friend is... *raises one eyebrow*

Actually, I can only raise one eyebrow on here. I just cant do it in real life! It frustrates me cause I so wanna be able to do it, and Shannon can, and I can't, and, and...

*sniff* its ok. i'll live.

WOW thats all I can say.

I KNOW RIGHT?!
Narlene should be a writer!
Not a la di da Psychiatrists (See I can't even spell it!! I can spell writer!!)
LOL.

40: I can raise one eybrow! I do it all the time to Jon and he gets all annoyed, like you do. Bwahahaha!!!

actually, you can't even spell writer. You said "writier". :P

Oh no Leah's losing her super spelling!

noooo! is she near some kryptonite? :)

Nope.
I have the power to fix my boo-boo's.
It's called the edit button.
:P

lol

39: Haha..yeah. :)

No, that non-social butterfly isn't you, Casey. Sorry. :) That and the escaping into books thing is based on Alice.

42: Writing is too hard sometimes. I'm trying to turn the story into a novel..I've written 18 A4 pages on my laptop. I'll post the scene where Toni's mum (Jenny) dies and when Toni and Chace first meet..please tell me if you're getting bored with reading it or it's becoming annoying, or I'll keep posting parts of my story probably until it's finished..so get your reading glasses on! :D

BTW, I always raise one eyebrow at Jon and he's like, "I love how you do that..how do you do that?" Haha. :)

YAY!
I love your stories.
They're really good.

I sure will.
;)

Who is Chace based upon?

What?!
Like you can't guess!!!!??

Let me just say:
Arrogant.
Cocky.
Would make out with himself if he could.

Ya got it now??

I get it!!

Sorry, I just wanted to comment :D

Yeah.
Well done.
:)

Now we're all waiting on Athina.

Sif you don't know who Chace is based on sif. :)

Oh. the non social butterfly sounded like me. :)

"Chace" is arguing with Ms. Roeters about his grade right now. :D

Yes.
'Chace' is.
:P

Haha. What did he get? D?

umm, well hes failing so Ms Roeters is trying to convince him to turn in a poster so he can have a grade.

I curently have his shoe.
;)

I kinda guessed earlier about Jon, but I thought this was written last year so it seemed like someone else, but who, I don't know.

DAMN IT!
You're not supposed to write his name!
I liked refereing to him as 'chace' I thought it was funny.
:( You made me sad now...

Okay, I'll go read it now.

They were more doll-like than ever because now, like a doll’s, they did not see.

BEST LINE IN THE WHOLE STORY!
I have no idea why I love it but I do.

OME!
Thats me and Jon all over!
haha!
“That’s all you have?” Toni asked, incredulous. “I answer with an awesome comeback and all you can say is ‘well, well, looks like someone’s a bit grouchy’?”
“Unlike you, I do actually have a life. I don’t sit at home on Friday nights writing lists of comebacks.” Chace retorted, swinging out a chair and sitting down with his feet on the next.

“You said you didn’t like cake,” Chace said, finishing off his piece. “But yet you have cream on the side of your mouth, oddly, like the cream in this delicious cake.”

“WHATEVER. THROWING KNIVES ISN’T GOING TO MAKE ME LESS OF A LIAR, IS IT?” Toni yelled, pulling the knife out of the wall and waving it around.

“It would if it had gotten your chest.”

“Then I wouldn’t even be alive to lie, would I?” She continued, furious.

“Exactly.” He grinned, flashing a set of perfect teeth.

God.
It's so weird seeing little stupid banters played out.
;)

“Wouldn’t you like to know?” He winked and Toni felt charmed despite it.

NO!
Keep writing!
Never stop!
:D

Okay. *calls Narlene* 'Don't stop writing'

No.
Only one.
The other is a story she is writing.
We are all just reading it.
Only reply from 27.

hi.. i just wanted to leave a message coz im currently VERY bored!!
lols

LOL.
Have you read Narlene's story??
It's so good!

OMG!!!
its so good. narlene you should enter it into one of those writing comps youd win!!! or that so you think you can write thing at TMC!!!

OMG!!! OMG!!! OMG!!!

OMG!! OMG!! OMG!!! OMG!! OMG!! OMG!!! OMG!! OMG!! OMG!!! OMG!! OMG!! OMG!!! OMG!! OMG!! OMG!!! OMG!! OMG!! OMG!!! OMG!! OMG!! OMG!!! OMG!! OMG!! OMG!!! OMG!! OMG!! OMG!!! OMG!! OMG!! OMG!!! OMG!! OMG!! OMG!!! OMG!! OMG!! OMG!!! OMG!! OMG!! OMG!!! OMG!! OMG!! OMG!!! OMG!! OMG!! OMG!!! OMG!! OMG!! OMG!!! OMG!! OMG!! OMG!!! OMG!! OMG!! OMG!!! OMG!!

OMG! THATS A LOT OF OMG'S!!!!!!!!!!!

W
O
W

Aww, thanks Natty Patty. :)
Oh..that writing thing..Ms. Liddy is taking my English short story and entering it! I have no say in the matter anyway..:)

good coz your a hell good writer!!!
72: i copied and pasted the OMG!! so i didnt physically write ALL of them but yeah

Thank you, Natty Patty (gosh, I love your nickname). :)
OMG!! Meh..it's the thought that counts. :)

thats ok Narly Parly =D
yeah i guess =D

74: Yes, but still, it was a lot of OMG's!
;)

It twas, it twas.
OMG!!
I like that, that's catchy, OMG!!
*high fives Leah*

*high fives the most awesomest person in the wrold*

^^ Hmm, that was. . . Random.

THAT US SO GOOD!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

EXCLAMATION POINT.............. !

Wow. Have you figured out Toni's gift yet?

Well..she can see the dead!
I'm planning a trilogy..okay, I know it sounds ambitious b/c I haven't even finished writing the first but, I can't let Toni and Chace go!
So in the second book..I'm gonna get a new character (a friend of Ana) who has the same gift as Toni and she trains Toni to see/hear other ghosts besides her mother..which is going to be a little problem in the book b/c Toni then loses ability to hear/see her mother b/c she hasn't anywhere near mastered her Gift so then she loses contact with her mother. And I'm planning for Toni to master her Gift and her mother comes back only once in her dreams to tell her that Toni doesn't need her anymore and her memories are enough and she goes away for forever.
About Toni and Chace's romance..I have to make something happen in the second book to break them up so it seems like they're never gonna get back together..won't spoil the third book! :)

WOW!
I still need to read the fight scene you just wrote.
And now there's a trilogy in the mix!
Okay then!
:)

Yep! I've never written so much in my entire life before! I just can't stop writing about them! I'm probably gonna need glasses for all the time I spend in front of the computer.
Also, Leah and Athina, I've decided you two are going to be my editors so tomorrow night I'm gonna put all the parts in order, add in notes and you two are going to have the LOVELY (cough, cough) job of editing my story so far..also, add in stuff if you want but make the words red instead of black so I can see what you've put in. Add any ideas you have as well. :) BTW..you can't argue, you two are my editors. Thanks loveies!

OME! THATS SOOO GOOD!!!!!

Nawww.
YAY!
I'm soo excited!!!!!!!!

okie dokie!

Yayy! How are we going to edit it? Print it out? Give us a copy on our USB's?

I can't wait to edit your story it is so awesome!

Two or three weeks ago I had to edit Andrew's (Asian) story and it was so messed up that me Jenne and Mally gave up after the first paragraph.

^Um..yeah, I'll give it to you on your USB. Leah has it already.

LOL! I know..Toni's English short story was really messed up too..it was COVERED in changes and notes by Ms. Bower..it was crazy.

Thats b/c it was a recount.
as far as writing goes for Toni... yeah she shouldn't quit her day job :S

LOL, true, true.
Aww, the poor chick means well but seriously, a song-writer?
She's told me off all the things she wants to be..a model, an actress, or a flight attendant.
Okay..the first, yeah, maybe she could do it but NO OFFENCE, she's a generic type of pretty, the sort of girls who become models are almost so interesting-looking that they're nearly ugly..Toni's got a sort of "sweet" prettiness.
Second, she's a terrible actress. At that Threatre Sports Olympics thingy, she just kept laughing. Yes, I'm probably gonna laugh too but keep in mind; I don't want to be an actress.
The third one seems like the best option. You don't need to be incredibly talented (not saying Toni isn't) and she's pretty and friendly, which you'd want in a flight attendant.
Well, there's my useless opinion for the day. :)

Oh dear, I've come back from a period away, and wonder what happened to our story? That's now the second one we began here that got buried...

There now seems to be a mass of narrative to read through that isn't anything to do with the story we began? I think I will leave this thread as it is a great idea that somehow seems to be doomed.

:-(

Bye

^Sorry! But all my friends on here (we all go to the same school) are reading parts of a story I am writing. I'm not posting parts on here anymore as my friend has printed out the story and is editing for me on paper. Please continue with the story. :)

92: FLIGHT ATTENDANT!!!!!! HAHAHAAHA!!! She will get annoyed with people when they rudly ask for a piloow! She would freakin; ditch it at their heads!!! HAHAHA!!
And an actress, yeah I knew about that one...
model! I agree she could be one, when she stops calling herself ugly just to get everyone around her to tell her how pretty she is. I swear one day I'm just gonna agree:
Toni: "I'm so ugly!"
Leah: "I know right!"
Toni: :o

Anyways. There's my pointless opinion for the day!

Now....
Where did we leave off....
A man made of chocolate appeared at my window!

"WOOOO." He said in a ghostly voice. "WOOOO."

"Go away!" I yelled, covering my jungle-like legs with a blanket.

"Wow! Those are some hairy legs!" He replied, tipping his strawberry and creams hat. "It's a jingle out there, bru."

He opened my door without invitation and passed me a golden jar.

"Never ending wax and..it pulls out the most stubbornest of hairs, I used it on my gorilla, it works wonders and it never runs out! Good day, Hairy!"

I stared at the jar in wonder and the lid opened with a pop.

"ARRGGGH!" I screamed..

MY TURN!

The gluggy mess sprang at me with such foce that it threw me accross the room. What was this stuff? I wiped the goo out of my eys and peered at the lable. . .

It was burning holes in the table like toxic sludge! I screamed, the only thing to do was..

Leave, it wasn't my house anyway, I walked out of the door and immediatly dropped to the floor, "DAMN IT!" I muttered to myself. My legs were too heavy for me to lift as I walked, the hair had gotten too thick.
I started to yell for help, the so called wax was slowly eating it way towards me. . .

92: yeah but toni might start flirting with all the hot guys on the plane instead of actually assisting the other passengers

waaa how do you do the italics? I want to know...

oohhh, there we go.

</i>I've ended the italics! Muhahahaha! :D

FINISH THE GOD DAMN STORY!!!!!!!!

:)
smiles

...I reached towards the can of spinach and ate it all, suddenly, I was ten times stronger and I could carry my legs! I ran from the house as the goo ate it but it did not stop there..