Great book! Historical fiction at its finest. Tales of love, honor, battle, and revenge woven deeply into the construct of the factual time period. I am looking forward to the rest of the series!
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Good story-telling, and the characters are decently drawn, but I didn't like the writing mechanics here, which felt clumsy and made this book feel less interesting than it could've been. Probably still worth a look for those interested in this very early time period in English history (AD 600's). ( )

Well written and researched, atmospheric descriptive. Riveting from first to last page, with superb characters throughout. I was fortunate in one way to receive the latest book in the series from NetGalley, but enjoyed it so much I had to start back at the beginning, which could prove expensive, but based on this excellent read worth it. The action and there is plenty of it leaves little to the imagination, an absolute quality page turner.
Completely recommended. ( )

A Dark Ages page turner

Mathew Harffy delivers yet again. His take on historical fiction is superb. I can not wait to bury myself in the next book in The Bernicia Chronicles. ( )

“The Serpent Sword” features a blend of quality battles, tense encounters, and an engaging ‘boy-meets-girl’ storyline.

I liked it in the most part, but like with many historical novels, the author puts so much effort into getting the history elements correct that essential creative writing skills are neglected. Main problem being too much ‘telling’ and not enough ‘showing’.

Adverb overuse is another evil, and the biggest problem with adverbs is that they ‘tell’. For example, with ‘walked determinedly’ you have a weak verb coupled with a ‘telling’ adverb. There’s always a stronger verb than ‘walked’. In this case, ‘strode’ or ‘marched’ would’ve ‘shown’ the determined walk.

Adverbs are at their most superfluous with this kind of thing: “More slowly”, “more quickly”, “more brightly”, when ‘slower’, ‘quicker’, and ‘brighter’ convey the meaning in one concise verb.

Two style issues that irritated me are the overuse of ‘then’ (to state what happens next), and ‘had’ (past perfect).

To keep using ‘then’ is lazy and unimaginative. It’s fine in children’s books, but for gritty historical fiction I expect more imagination. Most can be cut, the rest replaced. It's sometimes natural for a character to say 'then', but this word should be purged from any third-person narrative.

The frequent use of ‘had’ in the past perfect tense is something all authors should avoid, as it reports on the scene rather than taking the reader into the action as it unfolds. The odd one is inevitable, but in this book it’s consistent, even though it would've been easy to cut them out.

For one thing, this narrative is in the past tense, so ‘had’ should only be used if a sentence sounds odd without it. For example, ‘He had said’ works as ‘he said’ because ‘said’ is in the past tense. ‘She had sat down’ flows better as ‘She sat down’ because ‘sat’ is past tense making 'had' superfluous. If a scene that’s past is being recalled, all that’s needed is to inform the reader that it has already happened, after which the frequent use of ‘had’ is unnecessary.

On the plus side, this author uses some excellent similes. I was impressed with his creativity in this department.

So, despite the criticisms, I liked this novel well enough to read the next in the series. ( )